BÀI SAMPLE IELTS WRITING TASK 2 17/02/2024
Đề bài
More people put their personal information online (address, telephone number…) for everyday activities such as socializing on social networks or banking. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
Phân tích đề bài
Dạng bài: Positive – Negative
Keywords cần lưu ý: put personal information online – everyday activities
Độ khó: Trung bình – Chủ đề trong đề bài không quá xa lạ với mọi người trong cuộc sống hiện đại, tuy nhiên thí sinh vẫn cần lưu ý rằng phạm vi đề khá rộng khi đưa ra “everyday activities” nói chung. Ngoài ra, thí sinh cũng cần phân tích kỹ những đối tượng chịu ảnh hưởng tốt/ xấu để có hướng đi phù hợp trong bài.
Cách tiếp cận trong bài mẫu:
- Ý kiến tổng quan: Đây là xu hướng có hại.
- Body 1: Ảnh hưởng xấu của xu hướng này đến với cá nhân.
- Body 2: Ảnh hưởng xấu của xu hướng đến chính phủ và xã hội.
Band điểm ước tính cho bài viết mẫu: 7.5
Bài mẫu
Many people tend to leave their personal information online out of convenience for communicating or banking activities. I believe this is an unwelcome development since it will pose various threats to people’s lives and the government.
On an individual level, leaving personal information on untrusted sites can lead to financial loss and reputation damage. Personal information such as ID or phone number serves as gateways to many online platforms and financial services. Once this data is stored on untrusted sites, it becomes susceptible to collection, disclosure, and access by cyber attackers seeking to steal money from people’s accounts. Moreover, in instances where business owners experience identity theft, their financial losses become more severe as hackers gain entry to customer and business-related data. Additionally, hackers with access to personal information can take control of people’s social accounts, posting embarrassing pictures or videos that can ruin both personal and professional life.
Reckless sharing of personal information on the internet will pose significant challenges for the government regarding cybersecurity management. As more people share personal information recklessly, cybercrimes exacerbate in scale and severity, making it more difficult for the government to combat these crimes. In addition, this cybercrimes advancement also requires governments to allocate more funds for cybersecurity technology to detect criminal activities. These are major challenges to the government in terms of governing and protecting data security for people.
In conclusion, leaving personal information online recklessly will pose risks of financial loss and reputation damage for individuals. From the government’s perspective, this trend presents significant challenges for government cybersecurity management, requiring increased resources to combat escalating cybercrimes.
Từ vựng
reputation damage: thiệt hại về danh tiếng
gateways (noun): đường vào/ đường dẫn tới điều gì đó
becomes susceptible to: trở nên dễ bị ảnh hưởng (tiêu cực) bởi …
cybercrime (noun): tội phạm công nghệ
Reckless (adjective): bất cẩn, có thể gây nguy hiểm cho bản thân hoặc người khác
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