Bài mẫu Writing Task 2 band 7.0+ ngày 7/3/2024

 Bài mẫu Writing Task 2 band 7.0+ ngày 7/3/2024

Đề bài:

Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Độ khó: Khó

Cách tiếp cận trong bài mẫu:

Ý kiến tổng quan: mọi người hiện nay trở nên phụ thuộc hơn vào người khác về sự công nhận và tiếp thu thông tin, tuy nhiên trở nên độc lập hơn về tài chính và việc phát triển bản thân.

Body 1: Giải thích tại sao mọi người lại lệ thuộc vào nhau hơn về sự công nhận và tiếp thu thông tin.

Body 2: Giải thích tại sao mọi người lại trở nên độc lập hơn về tài chính và việc phát triển bản thân.

Band điểm ước tính cho bài viết mẫu: 7.5

Phân tích đề bài

Dạng bài: Discussion essay

Keywords cần lưu ý: modern world – more dependent – each other – more independent

Bài mẫu

Opinions differ as to whether modern life has fostered dependence or independence for people. Personally, I believe while people nowadays depend on each other in terms of recognition and information, they have gained more independence in terms of their financial situation and personal development.

On one hand, people in the modern world are increasingly dependent on each other in certain ways. For one, people become more dependent on others’ recognition. In fact, many employees now value recognition from their boss and colleagues in order to feel motivated at work, or people often seek validation from their friends by sharing their thoughts, feelings, and experiences on social media. This contributes to emotional dependence for many people in this era. Furthermore, people now depend on many information sources to evaluate data and make decisions. For example, many people in the business sector rely on sources including financial news, market analysis, and research reports to make informed decisions regarding asset purchases and sales. 

However, I believe modern life has fostered increased independence for people in terms of their finances and personal development. For one, people are becoming more financially independent since they are increasingly exposed to finance-related knowledge through various sources such as finance-focused podcasts and YouTube channels by experts. Therefore, they become more aware of being self-sufficient, rather than relying on their family for financial support. In addition, people now have more control over their personal development since they can acquire knowledge and skills in various fields through online courses, tutorials, and educational platforms. This empowers them to take control of their personal growth without relying much on support from their teachers, parents or colleagues. 

In conclusion, despite the increasing reliance on others for recognition and information in today’s fast-paced world, I believe people have become more independent in terms of financial situation and personal development.

Highlight vocabulary

Recognition (noun): sự công nhận

Seek validation (verb phrase):tìm kiếm cảm giác được chấp nhận

Emotional dependence (noun phrase): sự phụ thuộc về cảm xúc

Asset purchases (noun phrase): thu mua tài sản

Financially independent: độc lập tài chính

Finance-focused podcasts (noun phrase): podcasts về tài chính

Empower (verb): tiếp thêm sức mạnh

Fast-paced world (noun phrase): thế giới phát triển nhanh



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